搜狗做题网请老师给第一篇改错,然后给这两篇打个分,
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请老师给第一篇改错,然后给这两篇打个分,
【 第一篇】改错,打分
Nowdays,students depend on computer more and more.Observing from the picture,we can clearily understand this tendency.In this college,the numbers of students using computer has increased eight【图片描述应该是9倍】 times during ten years.
I argue its reason has mainly arisen from the two following factors,In the first place,with speedy development of the society,the computers exists in our life more and more,so,students have to mastered it,in order to easily adapt to the society.In the other place,computer can offer us a approach of communication,enables us to associate with each other easily.
But,there are also some problems in these students,it mainly refers to students can't make full use of computer.For example,students always play computer game with their computer.So,it is necessary that we should attach importance to these problems
【第二篇】打分
这是以前写的,看看有没有进步
【 第一篇】改错,打分
Nowdays,students depend on computer more and more.Observing from the picture,we can clearily understand this tendency.In this college,the numbers of students using computer has increased eight【图片描述应该是9倍】 times during ten years.
I argue its reason has mainly arisen from the two following factors,In the first place,with speedy development of the society,the computers exists in our life more and more,so,students have to mastered it,in order to easily adapt to the society.In the other place,computer can offer us a approach of communication,enables us to associate with each other easily.
But,there are also some problems in these students,it mainly refers to students can't make full use of computer.For example,students always play computer game with their computer.So,it is necessary that we should attach importance to these problems
【第二篇】打分
这是以前写的,看看有没有进步
As seen from the picture, we can clearly... the number of students. during the past.. i believe it's mainly due to two factors. (the computers exist in our life more and more = computers play a very dominant role in our society, students have to master it, ... secondly computers act as a means of communication enabling us to interact with a wide variety of people more easily.
however computers have also created problems, especially fr students who can't make full use of them. PLaying computer games or online gaming has become like an addiction to many people...
it is necessay that we attach importance
online shopping has become a fashion trend.
intead of going to the market...
of course - not used in formal writing normally
benefition?
did you mean convenienced?- not usually used
on the contrary- not usually used like this-- here " on the other hand" sounds better
has many problems... presents many problems... problem with an s. u used many
products are original not true
and its " we are not sure whether the products are original or not"
just throught the picture. from is okay.
so may diif .. internet? = don't understand
however... everytime= strange. = all the sellers can't be trusted
next sentence= meaning unclear
next sentence= meaning unclear with grammatical errors. in my opininio, ... it is suggests is wrong
last two sentences r strange
还行. 有进步
however computers have also created problems, especially fr students who can't make full use of them. PLaying computer games or online gaming has become like an addiction to many people...
it is necessay that we attach importance
online shopping has become a fashion trend.
intead of going to the market...
of course - not used in formal writing normally
benefition?
did you mean convenienced?- not usually used
on the contrary- not usually used like this-- here " on the other hand" sounds better
has many problems... presents many problems... problem with an s. u used many
products are original not true
and its " we are not sure whether the products are original or not"
just throught the picture. from is okay.
so may diif .. internet? = don't understand
however... everytime= strange. = all the sellers can't be trusted
next sentence= meaning unclear
next sentence= meaning unclear with grammatical errors. in my opininio, ... it is suggests is wrong
last two sentences r strange
还行. 有进步