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英文好的来给看下,这句话这么说行不行?怎么改比较好
Enclosed is the application supporting materials of ABC,which has been submitted to the online application system to be considered for admission of Materials Science ,M.S.of DEF University.
Enclosed is the application supporting materials of ABC,which has been submitted to the online application system to be considered for admission of Materials Science ,M.S.of DEF University.
您是不是想说：
随附的是ABC的申请证明材料,这些材料已经通过在线申请系统提交,用于DEF大学材料科学系的申请批准.
我个人觉得to be considered for admission of Materials Science ,M.S.of DEF University有点罗嗦,其实可以去掉前面的application和后面的to be considered,改成：
Enclosed is the supporting materials of ABC,which has been submitted to the online application system for the admission of Materials Science of DEF University.
如果翻译的不对,后面的话算我没说.
随附的是ABC的申请证明材料,这些材料已经通过在线申请系统提交,用于DEF大学材料科学系的申请批准.
我个人觉得to be considered for admission of Materials Science ,M.S.of DEF University有点罗嗦,其实可以去掉前面的application和后面的to be considered,改成：
Enclosed is the supporting materials of ABC,which has been submitted to the online application system for the admission of Materials Science of DEF University.
如果翻译的不对,后面的话算我没说.