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Today,I want to recommend a movie called “Hachi:a dog’s story”.The story is between a man named parker and a dog called hachi.
One day,parker found a dog at the train station.He gave it a name called Hachi and took it home.
After several months,Hachi become a member of the family.Every morning,Hachi followed Parker to the train station and waited for him.
However,after few years,parker died of heart disease and he would never come back.But Hachi didn’t believe this,he thought his master would come back and play with him.So he waited at the same place every day for ten years.
At last,Hachi died at the train station on a snowy night in his dream.
The dog’s waiting moved me deeply.Because he waited for a man that would never appear .Because their relationship is so pure.
After watching this movie,I know every encounter is contains the mystery that is a kind of fate.And I know that Love,is the world's most happiest faith.So I keep asking myself,if fate let you wait for someone for the rest of the life,for every year,every season,every day.Will you do this?I don’t know,but I know Hachi will do.
Though,there are only two colors in Hachi’s eyes ---black and white.He felt the tenderest part of the world.Because he felt love,he was willing to wait.Because of love,he could see the most beautiful colors in the world.
If you have a dog,please remember you have a lot of friends to talk to,but he only have you to play with.Please remember dog is only one part of your life,but you are the whole world of him.
At last,I learned we should never forget anyone that we have loved.
That’s all.Thank you.
Today,I want to recommend a movie called “Hachi:a dog’s story”.The story is between a man named parker and a dog called hachi.
One day,parker found a dog at the train station.He gave it a name called Hachi and took it home.
After several months,Hachi become a member of the family.Every morning,Hachi followed Parker to the train station and waited for him.
However,after few years,parker died of heart disease and he would never come back.But Hachi didn’t believe this,he thought his master would come back and play with him.So he waited at the same place every day for ten years.
At last,Hachi died at the train station on a snowy night in his dream.
The dog’s waiting moved me deeply.Because he waited for a man that would never appear .Because their relationship is so pure.
After watching this movie,I know every encounter is contains the mystery that is a kind of fate.And I know that Love,is the world's most happiest faith.So I keep asking myself,if fate let you wait for someone for the rest of the life,for every year,every season,every day.Will you do this?I don’t know,but I know Hachi will do.
Though,there are only two colors in Hachi’s eyes ---black and white.He felt the tenderest part of the world.Because he felt love,he was willing to wait.Because of love,he could see the most beautiful colors in the world.
If you have a dog,please remember you have a lot of friends to talk to,but he only have you to play with.Please remember dog is only one part of your life,but you are the whole world of him.
At last,I learned we should never forget anyone that we have loved.
That’s all.Thank you.
作为一个初中生来说,这篇作文还是很不错的~
只是后面感想部分有些基本的语法错误,以后要注意点,修改如下：
After watching this movie,I know every encounter is（去掉） contains the mystery that（改成which） is a kind of fate.And I know that Love,is the world's most（多余） happiest faith.So I keep asking myself,if fate let you(改成与前面so句的宾语一致,me) wait for someone for the rest of the(my) life,for every year,every season,every day,Will you(与前面一致me) do this?I don’t know,but I know Hachi will do.
Though,there are only two colors in Hachi’s eyes ---black and white.He felt the tenderest part of the world.Because he felt love,he was willing to wait.Because of love,he could see the most beautiful colors in the world.
If you have a dog,please remember you have a lot of friends to talk to,but he only have(单复数不对has) you to play with.Please remember dog is only one part of your life,but you are the whole world of him.
At last,I learned we should never forget anyone that we have loved.
That’s all.Thank you.
只是后面感想部分有些基本的语法错误,以后要注意点,修改如下：
After watching this movie,I know every encounter is（去掉） contains the mystery that（改成which） is a kind of fate.And I know that Love,is the world's most（多余） happiest faith.So I keep asking myself,if fate let you(改成与前面so句的宾语一致,me) wait for someone for the rest of the(my) life,for every year,every season,every day,Will you(与前面一致me) do this?I don’t know,but I know Hachi will do.
Though,there are only two colors in Hachi’s eyes ---black and white.He felt the tenderest part of the world.Because he felt love,he was willing to wait.Because of love,he could see the most beautiful colors in the world.
If you have a dog,please remember you have a lot of friends to talk to,but he only have(单复数不对has) you to play with.Please remember dog is only one part of your life,but you are the whole world of him.
At last,I learned we should never forget anyone that we have loved.
That’s all.Thank you.