200分求改英语作文 （Are zoos cruel to animals?)

200分求改英语作文 （Are zoos cruel to animals?)
Nowadays more and more zoos are founding up to keep animals on the edge of exctintion.Someone think that zoos kep animals let them have achance to observe wild animals in person.However,I believe that zoos keep animals in cages is absilutely wrong!There are three reasons to surpport my opinion.
To begin with,I think animals will lose their natuiral wild quality,no doubt!The best example is a giant panda’s story.The Panda Saving center released agiant panda.Monthes later,it’s dead because of its breaking into a wild panda’s zone and fighting.So I think it’s clear that the animals growing at zoos can hardly survive in nature.
Moreover,I reckon that people don’t have the right to put animal into cages!Even that maybe help us to protect the animals,it’s unreasonable.We don’t have the right to do so.We can always see animals in cage turning around again and again,we can notice it obviously that they are annoyed.What if but human beings into cages and let animals see them out side?It totally disobey basic morals to sent animals into cages!
The last but not the least,keeping animals in zoos is breaking the eco-environment system.As we all know,nature can re arrange the system gerfectly by itself.If one kind of animals are no longer fit to be alive,they will die out.Stopping it with personal decision is not good for both the balance of the entire biological chain and the animals themselves.I hear that there is a kind of sheep living in America.They will fall down,if you just open an umbrella if front of them.The only reason they haven’t dead our I think is people feel funny by seeing them falling.Isn’t it cruel to animals?
In the final analysis ,even though zoos treat animals very well,I insist on that they cural to animals.Nobody has the right to imprison anyone including animal.Tigers,pandas,deers and so on,they are not treated on the fair way!So please show some mercy to them!

Nowadays more and more zoos have been established to keep animals on the edge of exctintion.Some think that zoos let them have a chance to observe wild animals in person.However, I believe that keeping animals in cages is absolutely wrong!There are three reasons to surpport my opinion.
To begin with,I firmly think animals will lose their natuiral wildness,The best example is a giant panda’s story.The Panda Saving center released a giant panda.Monthes later,it’s dead because of its breaking into a wild panda’s zone and fighting.So I think it’s clear that the animals growing at zoos can hardly survive in nature.
Moreover,I reckon that people don’t have the right to put animal in cages even it may help us to protect the animals.We don’t have the right to do so.We can always see animals in cages turning around again and again,it is obvious that they are annoying.What if put human beings into cages and let animals see them outside?It totally disobey basic morality to sent animals in cages!
Last but not the least,keeping animals in zoos is breaking the eco-system.As we all know,nature can rearrange the system perfectly by itself.If one kind of animals are no longer fit to be live,they will die out.Stopping it with personal decision is not good for both the balance of the entire biological chain and the animals themselves.I hear that there is a kind of sheep living in America.They will fall down if you just open an umbrella if front of them.The only reason they haven’t dead out I think is that people feel funny by seeing them falling.Isn’t it cruel to animals?
In the final analysis ,even though zoos treat animals very well,I insist on that they curel to animals.Nobody has the right to imprison anyone including animal.Tigers,pandas,deers and so on,they are not treated on the fair way!So please show some mercy to them!
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