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有什么语法错误什么的,或者换一些高级句型
Good afternoon,everyone.Today,I would like to introduce a new friend from Zhongshan.His name is LiHua.He was born in August 1996.He is a Senior1 student in Zhong Shan No.1 Middle school.LiHua is incredibly hard-working,so he did well in computer,Chinese,math,English and PE.He likes swimming best and he thinks swimming is interesting.His hobby is writing poetries.He won the first prise in the school poetry competition.He wants to find a pen pal whose hobby is writing poetry.Anyone who is interested in this,please call at 8883301.
前两句和最后一句是英语报纸的原题目给出的开头结尾,这个嘛算比较权威吧。
有什么语法错误什么的,或者换一些高级句型
Good afternoon,everyone.Today,I would like to introduce a new friend from Zhongshan.His name is Li Hua.He was born in August 1996.He is a Senior 1 student in Zhongshan No.1 Middle School.Li Hua is incredibly hard-working,so he does well in computer,Chinese,math,English and PE.He loves sports,he can swim very well and he thinks swimming is interesting.He can write beautiful poems and he has ever won the first prize in the school poetry competition.He wants to find a pen pal whose hobby is writing poems.Anyone who is interested in this,please call at 8883301.
帮你用心改了一下.写作要注意细节,一些小错误可以成为致命伤.